What should I add to improve resume?

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Isabel De La Riva

rockabilly1012007@yahoo.com

Dear Mr./Ms. Last Name:

My resume is enclosed for your review. Given my related experience and excellent

capabilities I would appreciate your consideration for this job opening. My skills are an

ideal match for this position.

In addition to my extensive office experience, I have strong communication, customer

service, and administrative skills. My broad background makes me an excellent

candidate for this position.

Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you to arrange an

interview.

Isabel De La Riva
Objective
To obtain entry level office position. I get along well with others, while also working efficiently on my own. Can offer strong organizational skills. Punctual and reliable with attention to detail.
SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS
I have some office equipment knowledge
I have computer knowledge
Phone skills
Work of experience
[ 07/06-present] United Mortgage Capital Irvine, CA
Assistant Loan Processor
Duties include
Answering and directing calls from clients to appropriate person
Assisting with screening calls and relaying messages
greeting and assisting clients
scheduling appointments
entering client information on appropriate forms
Assisting real estate agent with viewing
[ 08/05- 07/06] New World Mortgage Temecula, Ca
Office Assistant
Duties included
Answering and directing calls from clients to appropriate person.
Assisting with screening calls and relaying messages
greeting and assisting clients
scheduling appointments
Education
[ 01/06- 6/07] Val Verde High school Perris,Ca
General Education
Received high school diploma
LANGUAGES
Ability to understand the Spanish language
REFERENCES
Upon request

My most recent and relevent experience is in the mortgage/real estate/property management and transportation field for the past 10 years. Primarily as an executive administrative assistant and also as a loan processor. Prior to this I have manufacturing and retail experience dating from 1991-1998. Should I omit these jobs unless they are significant to the job for which I am applying?
Even if I omit them, My resume is still two full pages long! What should I do?

8 Comments
  1. Reply
    QueenBeeFee
    January 29, 2011 at 10:11 am

    My comments are in between asterisks.

    Objective
    To obtain entry level office position. I get along well with others, while also working efficiently on my own. Can offer strong organizational skills. Punctual and reliable with attention to detail.

    **Change to: (get rid of the “Objective” title – just list the info)
    Self-motivated team player with strong organization skills and attention to detail seeking entry-level administrative career opportunities.skills. Punctual and reliable with attention to detail.**

    SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS **change to Skills**
    Office equipment ***(be specific about what equipment)***
    Computer proficiency
    Phone skills
    ** also list any software you are proficient in**

    Work of experience **change to Summary of Qualifications**

    [ 07/06-present] United Mortgage Capital Irvine, CA
    Assistant Loan Processor

    Answer/direct calls from clients
    Greet and assist clients in person
    Schedule appointment
    Complete documentation
    Assist real estate agents with viewing **viewing what?? are you talking about taking clients to view properties??**

    [ 08/05- 07/06] New World Mortgage Temecula, Ca
    Office Assistant

    Answer/direct calls from clients
    Greet and assist clients in person
    Schedule appointment

    Education *** delete dates of attendance to prevent age discrimination **
    [ 01/06- 6/07] Val Verde High school Perris,Ca
    General Education
    Received high school diploma

    LANGUAGES **mention your level of proficiency – beginner, intermediate, advanced***
    Spanish (comprehension)

    REFERENCES *** delete this section, just have letters of reference ready if requested ****
    Upon request

    Hope this helps!

  2. Reply
    Carmen T
    January 29, 2011 at 10:28 am

    Your resume should be NO longer than 1 page.
    Some people will tell you otherwise. DOnt believe them. There are GOOD reasons why you should not exceed one page. Unless you have a very mature, extensive and impressive work history. There is always a way to cut it down if you are being concise.

  3. Reply
    Alex A
    January 29, 2011 at 11:17 am

    damn 3 pages do u mind if i steal a page. the more u omit the better

  4. Reply
    americanfreeman
    January 29, 2011 at 11:46 am

    For a young person, one page. For those with experience two pages. They stop reading after 2 pages.

  5. Reply
    gyggles000
    January 29, 2011 at 12:20 pm

    I was taught in my business mgmt classes that it should never be over two pages. Most people cannot fit there job history and education in one page, so keep it to two pages. I would omit the retail and manufacturing unless it applies. Try cutting down the details of each job to a short bullet list and combine the duties into one item when possible (example: answer multi-line phone system and greet walkin customers as needed)

  6. Reply
    Saiyuki_Anyone?
    January 29, 2011 at 12:48 pm

    From what I have been told, most employers prefer to read only 1 page resumes. However, here is a great website which may help you regarding when it is appropriate to have more than a 1 page resume:

    http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/571/01/

  7. Reply
    phylboul
    January 29, 2011 at 1:24 pm

    Here is what I answered today in another question:
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    YIYIYIYYI…. you need HELP!!! A resume is NOT just words on paper and has everything to do with providing information about your ability to do a job in most cases. I would hazard to say you have not had someone help you write a great resume and are feeling uncomfortable with it.

    There are many styles of resumes these days and some industries like certain ones more than others. What we do in Canada is often different what is done in the US so there are differences between countries too.

    A resume can make or break whether you get your foot in the door for even an interview. A resume (2 pages in length maximum) provides an employer a concise view of the skills you can offer them to do the work they have advertised. You only have 2-3 minutes to catch their attention enough to decide they will initially short list you. When they go to the second round of short listing they will take a little closer look at it and make a checklist of all your skills to check against their ideal candidate skill listing. It also needs to be written in the language style of the candidate as much as possible. All bad resumes get put to the bottom of the pile just in case they are the best of the worse if there are only a few submitted. If there is an overabundance of them the worst ones may be assigned to the shredder or placed in a file for a period of time and then disposed of. Rarely are resumes kept on file for any length of time as it is becoming the norm for businesses to ask them to be re-submitted.

    It contains these components (in the order that the employer reads it.) and the style of language can be changed to suit the kind of job/industry (formal or less formal:
    PAGE 1
    Summary of Professional Qualifications (formal)
    Summary of Work Qualifications (less formal)
    ~ a point form list of 4-6 of your best attributes or skills that are directly related to the job ad

    Professional & Volunteer Qualifications
    ~ point list form of your skills (i.e.Sales/Customer Service or Mechanical & Industrial Equipment Repair) – there could be 2 to 4 sub headings
    ~ up to maybe 12 points of what you have done to perform this skill including any accompliments (i.e. ~ increased sales quota by 34% in the first quarter of the year and maintained a 5% increase over and above that for each subsequent quarter)

    PAGE 2
    Professional & Volunteer Work History
    ~ this tells gives an employer a brief listing of the paid and unpaid work you have performed, where you did it and the timeline. You list it in columns in reverse chronological order this way:
    Job Title1 Business Name 1 Employment date (2006-2008)
    Job Title2 Business Name 2 Employment date (2006-2004)

    Education/Awards/Acknowledgements
    ~ list in reverse chronological order and include the certificate/degree you received, the school who awarded it, the graduation date

    References
    ~ are ALWAYS INCLUDED!!! (3-4 people) We used to not include information but times have changed. Employers now find it more convenient and less time consuming (do not have wait for you to submit it to them) to call references before they call you in for an interview. They can make better decisions whether to call you in or not.

    Those are the basic components. Of course, each person has to decide what their priorities are and decide what the best information will be included so as to keep in down to 2 pages. Employers absolutely do not take the time to review resumes like they did years ago. There may be cases though where the employer specifically requests particular information and documentation so that then resume is structured in a different way.

    Find someone in the employment field and ask for assistance if you do not know about resumes. I do find that many online are still done “the old fashioned way” with lengthy information.

    The resume is a tool to get the interview. The interview is where you really get to shine and provide evidence that you have the skills and experience they are looking for. The interview is where you prove you have the ability and apptitude to perform the job. Words cannot prove it … YOU have to!

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    NOTE: if you can get your resume on 1 page… good for you but I know that from what you have said you have some great skills… it would be a shame to gloss over them by being too brief. And remember YOU will make the decision of how your resume is presented …. there is no wrong way or right way … only a better way. I have worked in the employment field so I am qualified to say what I’ve said. You are welcome to contact me for further information.

  8. Reply
    test pilot
    January 29, 2011 at 2:16 pm

    By all means your resume should never exceed 2 pages. Employers think negatively about lengthy resumes. 1 page is preferred unless you have extensive background and job experiences that demand the use of 2 pages but NEVER exceed 2 pages or the person looking at it will stop reading after the second page anyway. Being able to encapsulate your job history in the least amount of space possible shows your ability to get your point across and keep it simple… the old K.I.S.S scenario.

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